The forest morning was crisp. I walked alone with the leaves cracking under my feet. I clutched my coat closer against the chilling fall winds. The trees looked almost skeletal against the clear air. Up ahead along the trail -- leaning against a fallen tree -- was the person I had come to meet. He was my good friend and today we intended to wander the woods for the day with his acquaintance, a guide who knew the area quite well.
When I arrived the guide shook my hand. For a split second it seemed like the wind suddenly got colder, but the feeling soon passed. Then, for the next several hours we were shown all there was to see in the acres of wilderness. After this time we came upon a house in the woods sticking out like a sore thumb. Our guide strode confidently toward it. I stood hesitantly until something caught my eye. In the window was a transparent figure looking out the window. I ran away back to my car screaming.
The two remaining men look at each other for a second. The guide looked over to my friend and asked "Did you tell him about my wife and me by chance?" The friend replied "no, it must have slipped my mind." The guide simply replied "Oh well, lets go see what's for lunch". With that the friend walked around to the door as the guide turned transparent and went through the wall.
this is a magpie tale http://magpietales.blogspot.com/ and a poet rally post. For the perfect poet award I nominate because they comment on all my posts Brian and jingle.
I like it - it's so scary! Well written, i wasn't expecting the end.
ReplyDeleteoh delightfully spooky...good to see you playing magpie again...a departure from your usual style it seemed...nice.
ReplyDeleteOh, I love it!!! What a fantastic end
ReplyDeleteha ha- clever twist!
ReplyDeletedisappear through the wall,
ReplyDeletemagical...lovely tale!
Thanks for the support in Poets Rally,
ReplyDeleteu r one of the oldest participants, I appreciate your talent, dedication, and friendship.
Happy Thursday!
Thanks for the nomination!
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Lovely post..
ReplyDeleteHappy Rally...
Sweet Dish
--Someone Is Special--
Love details and clever storytelling...bravo!
ReplyDeleteGreat story. I'm not sure what happened at the end, but I like the story anyway.
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I like how you created an image from the picture I did not recognize until AFTER I had read your great story. Nice job!
ReplyDeleteI admire people who can walk through walls! Well done!
ReplyDeleteI like the walking thru walls too, very science fictionary..lol. Nice piece of writing.
ReplyDeletewoah!!! weird
ReplyDeleteA piece of well-written but creepy prose. You have left all supposition to the reader, which is what good writing should do.
ReplyDeleteThe best guides can walk through walls I have found! How else can we survive...what a killer post!
ReplyDeleteHappy Rally!
and I look foward to seeeing you at Jingle Poetry
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Awesome JP!
ReplyDeleteYou crack me up!
You are a fantastic storyteller!
ReplyDeleteA very nice Magpie :)
ReplyDeletevery enjoyable reading
Nice double shot here for rally and Magpie. Bisous, Love and Light, Sender
ReplyDeleteI love a delicious spooky shiver!
ReplyDeleteScary! Then what happens?
ReplyDeleteHey JP it is your cousin Gwynneth i luv everything you are so good you could be the next Alex Rider
ReplyDeleteSincerely,
Leaping ghyzells
So, what IS for lunch? Fun story.
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